How Active Voice Improves Your Prose

 Hello! Good morning, or evening, and welcome to this week's article, How Active Voice Improves Your Prose. If you're new, Hi! I'm Kaylee Umstead, author of the book The King's Actors and after six years of intensive research and study on improving my prose, I'm here to cut out the middle man and make your writing journey easier by sharing what I've learned! Here at the Homestead, I strive to equip new writers with the tools needed to make their novel shine. Today we will discuss the importance of voice, more specifically, active versus passive voice.So without further ado, let's get into it.

You probably remember learning about active and passive voice in English class as a kid. Us pre-covid students sat in desks all tightly fitted into rows and recited the definition “Active voice: The subject performs an action, Passive voice: the subject is acted upon”. If this is familiar, like me, you probably thought it was silly and once you took the test, promptly forgot about it. I'm going to reteach it to you today in a way that's applicable to you and your writing.

Passive voice in modern writing is one of the red flags that a writer is just starting out. Sentences like “The ball was rolled by Alex” or “Alex was rolling the ball” are sentences weighed down by the word “was”. Passive voice doesn't excite the reader's imagination and leaves them feeling bored and uninterested. Your writing should be so gripping that the reader struggles to put it down. Chapter after chapter they flip, just waiting for what happens next! Now most authors believe “I'll hire an editor and they'll fix all that for me.” There are different types of editors, developmental editors which focus on plot, characters, and construction, and copy editors who focus on the grammar and spelling of the materials. Neither of these changes your words. However if you hire a line editor, they focus on sentence clarity and construction, but can be expensive. Now that we've determined the problem, the question is, if passive voice will undermine my prose, what will enhance it?

First we need to remove the sticky words, words that keep together a sentence. You have the important words like nouns and verbs, and then the sticky words that keep them together. These are words such as conjunctions, linking verbs, or participals. If there are too many sticky words, you have a cluttered mess. Instead of saying “Alex was rolling the ball" we can improve it by saying “Alex rolled the ball”. It's incredible how much a small change can impact a sentence, but I promise that the switch to Active voice is worthwhile. Active voice is structured as “subject does something”. It can be used for inanimate objects like leaves or buildings. “The building stretched tall” versus “Stretching tall was the building” (alternatively “The buildings were stretching tall”). By using Active voice instead of Passive voice, we can strengthen our prose into lyrical genius. 

Thank you for stopping in, friends! Next week I'll be explaining what is a trope, which ones are popular, how to ensure your novel doesn't use something overly cliche and if it does, how to twist it into something incredibly creative! See you next week, but until then, stay tuned!